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Hi everyone, Welcome to the revision reflection assignment video. So the instruc

Hi everyone, Welcome to the revision reflection assignment video. So the instructions are posted in the week 5 module, but I’m just going to go through them with you as we would in an in-person class to give you some tips and reminders to help you succeed on this assignment. So for this assignment, you’re going to be using the red level strategies, the orange and the yellow level strategies. So what you’re going to do essentially is revise writing assignment 1, the memo. Only this time you will work on, first of all, improving the red level strategies by reviewing your feedback on the memo and perhaps editing the subject line using the direct organization. If you didn’t do that last time, including a few more details for completeness and accuracy and so on. So be sure to look at your feedback on writing assignment one. And to do that, you’ll need to go to the assignment through the grades tab. So access writing assignment 1 through the grades tab. Open the assignment, open your submission and then click (the percentage icon). That way you’ll be able to see the annotation comments–in other words, the comments within the document. And then the end comments will appear in the text box at the side. And then click Show rubric so you can see, okay, well, I did pretty well on subject fine, but I need to work on ensuring completeness and accuracy and using direct organization. So I want to be sure to look at my instructor’s comments and revise accordingly. All right, then you will add in the orange and yellow level strategies. So you’ll add goodwill. So remember, find a way to thank the reader, acknowledge potential obstacles. But that can be a little bit tricky when you’re trying to use positive emphasis. So you generally want to begin by finding something positive to say about the organization or thanking the reader. Both in the introduction–in the opening paragraph–and in the closing paragraph. Alright, you will then want to emphasize reader benefits. So don’t focus on you, focus on the reader. How will this help them, right, with a positive emphasis? So again, try to avoid negative phrases. Instead, focus on what can be improved going forward. What will be refined, what will be changed, what will be implemented? What will be done to help with the situation? Alright? In this case, remember it’s using social media for Housing Solutions. So don’t focus on the negative. In fact, as considering what we don’t have now. But focus on what we will have as a result of implementing your social media campaign to increase fundraising and outreach. So remember, fundraising and outreach. Both of those are key elements, alright? Right with the reader base emphasis. So remember, try to use you or the reader’s name perhaps. Or the organization in this case would probably be more appropriate. Instead of saying for our company, remember Housing Solutions is a non-profit. So just say Housing Solutions or our organization. Alright, so try to do that instead of focusing on you as the writer for the yellow level strategies, you want to refine information to make it more useful. For example, you’re going to need to summarize the different platforms that you think Housing Solutions should use. Don’t give them a link. Don’t incorporate blocks, large blocks of text from another source about the platforms. It’s your job to research those and summarize them for the owners, the directors, so they can decide, Okay, well, instagram sounds really good, and we should definitely update our Facebook page. I don’t know as much about Tiktok, so need to learn more about it before I can make a decision. But at least now I have an idea of what it is. All right, so your job is to refine information to make it more useful. Use SSPD, so standard style for printed documents. So that means you’re going to include headings that are informative in this case, remember, your headings need to need to include positive outcomes. You don’t just want to say Instructions. So as an example, I used headings in– in this assignment document as well, Instructions for Successfully Completing the Assignment. So I included a positive outcome there. All right, resources for assistance. Strategies you will use for this assignment, right? So all these began with a noun–Strategies, Instructions, Resources. And they include the outcomes, not just strategies, but strategies you will use for this assignment. Okay? So for this assignment you are viewing the video. So you’re going to use all the red level strategies and improve on how you did so based on your feedback on writing assignment one. And then you will add in the orange level strategies and the yellow level strategies. All of them, not just some of them. So we talked about goodwill, opening, closing paragraphs, revising word choice for positive emphasis. That’s the biggest issue I saw in the writing assignment, drafts that I reviewed. And again, it can be tricky, as we’ve discussed in previous videos, it can be tricky to focus on the positive. When, for example, for writing assignment three, you have negative things going on in the company that you want to address, but you don’t want to dwell on that. You don’t want to dwell on the negative. Focus on going forward, what can be done, what will be changed, what will be implemented to improve, for example, customer satisfaction or for the memo. Awareness in the community, perhaps of Housing SSolutions and how you help those in need. Alright, so think about the positive and that will be easier to do probably going back to the writing assignment 1 and revising it as opposed to the refusal letter and the report. But keep that in mind. You will need to also add a list of some sort. So remember, you don’t want to just put a list in that you could easily incorporate into a sentence. A list should be– remember–that’s the way to help readers easily absorb and quickly absorb the information. So maybe you could list some advantages of implementing the social media campaign. And remember to use parallel construction. So for example, you can began each bullet point in your list with a gerund, an I-N-G verb, like marketing will help Housing Solutions do X. Communicating. What We do to Assist the Community Will Help Housing Solutions do Y, and so on. All right, so keep that in mind. And you will want to go back and change the font to Times New Roman (12 point font) except for the headings which are an Arial bold. So I did that for this assignment document as well. So you can see just as a little reminder of what your memo will look like. All right, we talked about how to view your specific comments. But just to review that, go to the submission, Writing Assignment 1 through the grades tab. Open that up and then you’ll see in (the percentage icon) click there. So you can see comments within the document. Make all those corrections first or edits or additions depending on what I said. And then you, of course, you’ll also want to click Show rubric to see where you did well and what you need to work on improving for the next version. All right, so then this is the reflection aspect. So for part one, you’re going to revise the memo, adding all of the orange level strategies and all yellow level strategies and refining your use of the red level strategies. For part two, It’s the reflection part. So that’s five questions about your revision process and they’re on the form, but they’re also here for your convenience. All right. Okay., so actually now it’s four questions. Sorry, I have to update that. I made a few changes before posting it. Alright, so you’re then going to open up the revision and reflection assignment form. So this is the form because we want one document. You can’t submit multiple documents. And I have to have everything in one document to be able to grade it. So you’re going to use this form. So you can just delete that and place your original WA1 here if you want (to delete where it says WA1), but you don’t have to. So just paste the original submission. There doesn’t need to include the comments. It’s just your original Word document submission, which you can also access in the writing assignment 1 Dropbox. You can download that and then paste it so that’s your original. So I can look back and compare it to the revision. Right, then you revise. One will be here. So this will be what you add, will just add the memo here after you refine the red level strategies and add in the orange and yellow level strategies. Alright, and then you’ll answer these questions. So again, here, answer them on this document, not anywhere else, not in the comments section. I need all of this in one document. What changes have you made to your writing assignment One based on the specific feedback and rubric score. So basically how have you refined the red level strategies, your use of the red level strategies. What changes have you made to your writing assignment 1 to improve your use of that? Of the orange level strategies. At least two of the orange level strategies in your response, that should say to use the orange level strategies, sorry, I’ll fix that. What changes have you made it to use the yellow level strategies, what additions have you made? So you’re going to include all of them, all the orange level strategies and all the yellow level strategies in the responses here. You can just talk about two of them. You don’t have to talk about all of them in the reflection for the orange and yellow level strategies. But you do, as stated here on the assignment document, need to include all right, and then how the specific changes resulted in a more professional document. So what, for example, has adding SSPD done to make your document more readable and more easily readable by the Directors of Housing Solutions And then also I’m just interested in how you might use these strategies in the future in academic or workplace settings. And you will. So think about that. For example, if you’re writing a memo in your first entry level job after you graduate from college. If you’re writing a memo to your supervisor, you’ll reflect back and remember, oh, yes, I need to begin with goodwill. Oh, yes. I need to include enough information in it for my supervisor to make a decision, and so on. All right. Okay, and then here is the rubric for the revision and reflection. So I’m going to look at how well you’ve used the red level strategies. Did you clearly establish purpose and audience? So remember for that you want to state while you’re writing in paragraph 1. And that also goes along with using the direct organization. So uses simple concrete direct language, aligns language and purpose. So you don’t want to use (social media) terms the directors might not be familiar with. You don’t want to use a bunch of thesaurus words, either to make yourself sound really smart or because you are smart as it is, you don’t need to use the source words to sound smart. Trust me. It just isn’t the best idea, especially in workplace correspondence. Everyone in the workplace has plenty of work to do. They don’t need to spend time trying to decipher what you’ve said. Using thesaurus words, they just need, need the information. Alright, is complete inaccurate. The subject line is highly informative and purposeful. So one thing I noticed is that a lot of people for the subject line for the memo did not include both of the concepts that were mentioned, fundraising and outreach. So be sure to include both of those words, content in your subject line. You should also include the key phrase social media. And you want to, of course, be positive in your subject line. You don’t want to say something like our social media use is terrible or, or ineffective social media use. Now, focus on again, what can be done, what you will do, or have you refined the information. Again, we talked about that so the Anderson’s know what it is you are proposing specifically and how the platforms are different. If Instagram and Facebook are both social media with reels, or both can include reels then why use both? So you want to explain generally different audiences. Another way to get the word out there about Housing Solutions and so on. Headings are very informative. So again, we’ve talked about this several times, but we don’t want just one word headings, right? You want your headings to be specific and informative and they should include outcomes as well. So review that in the yellow level strategies tutorial. And remember I like how they’re described in there. In the tutorial. They’re described as like newspaper headlines. You wouldn’t just put DBU wins. You’d put DBU Women’s Basketball Wins Regional Tournament. All right. So you want your headings to be informative or a, did you use SSPD? So you’ve got the headings and Arial Bold. The content is in Times New Roman 12 point font, lists are used effectively, and they are written with parallel structure. All right, for the yellow level strategies, did you see an error here? 

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